Thanks Jessica for submitting your lyrics. Everyone: Please leave some constructive criticism and comments for Jessica.
Here is my review:
Overall I think the lyrics are decent. Wish I knew the tempo and rhythm of the song to understand them a bit more. The entire peace seems a bit short and potentially rushed in my opinion. Taking some of the predictability out of the lyrics would help to keep it more interesting. But like I said, its easy to say its rough when reading it, but it could be riveting when placed with the right accompaniment and in the correct rhythm.
I was never gonna leave the ground,
Never ever gonna make a sound,
untill you said you would never ever let me down
I was a butterfly that couldnt see the sky,
now that you've passed me by,
I can fly
Come on and take my hand untill we die,
we are soring high,
One day i was looking around and i realised,
that i had left the ground and made a sound,